Comments for Creative Writing Chronicles http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org Stratford High School's Literary Journal Mon, 15 Dec 2008 19:22:27 -0500 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.2 hourly 1 Comment on Scandalous By C.M by Meghen Sanders http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/15/scandalous-by-cm/comment-page-1/#comment-27 Meghen Sanders Mon, 15 Dec 2008 19:22:27 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=41#comment-27 Wow! The misogyny in your poem is quite shocking. Poetry is a great outlet for emotions, but perhaps you should examine the roots of your malevolence. “Those who hate most fervently must have once loved deeply; those who want to deny the world must have once embraced what they now set on fire.” ~~Kurt Tucholsky Wow! The misogyny in your poem is quite shocking. Poetry is a great outlet for emotions, but perhaps you should examine the roots of your malevolence.

“Those who hate most fervently must have once loved deeply; those who want to deny the world must have once embraced what they now set on fire.” ~~Kurt Tucholsky

]]> Comment on Anticipation by D.B by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/09/anticipation-by-deandra-blackwell/comment-page-1/#comment-26 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:43:29 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=21#comment-26 What a great simile! I TOTALLY get the concept; I mean, some days I just don't know what to think anymore.... What a great simile! I TOTALLY get the concept; I mean, some days I just don’t know what to think anymore….

]]> Comment on The Experience by D.B by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/09/the-experience-by-deaundra-blackwell/comment-page-1/#comment-25 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:34:34 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=23#comment-25 I am really struck by the phrase, "a loop of immaturity"--the use of "loop" instead of "cycle", which is common, gives the concept freshness. And "loop" almost implies effortlessness, whereas "cycle" implies effort, or at least action. Nicely done. I am really struck by the phrase, “a loop of immaturity”–the use of “loop” instead of “cycle”, which is common, gives the concept freshness. And “loop” almost implies effortlessness, whereas “cycle” implies effort, or at least action. Nicely done.

]]> Comment on Love by D.B by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/09/love-by-deaundra-blackwell/comment-page-1/#comment-24 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:29:56 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=24#comment-24 Your color imagery (red/pink, blue/yellow) is particularly intriguing. It's the kind of stuff that would make students in an English class groan: "You mean you want us to figure out what it means?! Man, that's too much...." Your color imagery (red/pink, blue/yellow) is particularly intriguing. It’s the kind of stuff that would make students in an English class groan: “You mean you want us to figure out what it means?! Man, that’s too much….”

]]> Comment on The Storm by D.B by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/09/the-storm-by-deaundra-blackwell/comment-page-1/#comment-23 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:22:23 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=22#comment-23 The extended metaphor of rain for tears, etc. is rendered in such an original way and handled so well. Congratulations. The extended metaphor of rain for tears, etc. is rendered in such an original way and handled so well. Congratulations.

]]> Comment on Pain by A.S by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/11/pain-by-as/comment-page-1/#comment-22 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:19:59 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=25#comment-22 What a powerful way to describe an event that must have been nothing short of traumatic: "one of us got better / while the other one never woke up again." The indefinite pronoun (one) leaves the reader momentarily shaken and confused, much as you must have been. Thanks for sharing with us. What a powerful way to describe an event that must have been nothing short of traumatic: “one of us got better / while the other one never woke up again.” The indefinite pronoun (one) leaves the reader momentarily shaken and confused, much as you must have been. Thanks for sharing with us.

]]> Comment on Questions byA.S by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/11/questions-byas/comment-page-1/#comment-21 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:16:51 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=26#comment-21 Keep asking your questions! Most people don't see what you see because they simply don't want to think about it. Keep asking your questions! Most people don’t see what you see because they simply don’t want to think about it.

]]> Comment on 18 by A.S by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/11/18-by-as/comment-page-1/#comment-20 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:13:29 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=27#comment-20 I think it is totally cool that something makes you "want to jump up and sing"! I think it is totally cool that something makes you “want to jump up and sing”!

]]> Comment on Lost??? by A.S by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/11/lost-by-as/comment-page-1/#comment-19 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:05:50 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=28#comment-19 AMEN to sometimes just wanting to go into outer space! AMEN to sometimes just wanting to go into outer space!

]]> Comment on what is the Definition of fakeness? by S.P by Mr. Diehl http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/2008/12/11/what-is-the-definition-of-fakeness-by-sp/comment-page-1/#comment-18 Mr. Diehl Mon, 15 Dec 2008 18:01:07 +0000 http://creativewritingchronicles.edublogs.org/?p=31#comment-18 The questions you pose throughout are quite thought provoking, and they give your piece meaningful structure. The questions you pose throughout are quite thought provoking, and they give your piece meaningful structure.

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